Reading this had me totally locked in, wow! The phrase: “My eyeballs felt like two skinless grapes coated in thick, sharp salt chunks in their sockets. But I had to see,” captured this piece’s tension so stunningly. It truly felt like we were following the artist right down his descent. Amazing work!
Thank you so much! That's such great feedback! i couldn't ask for a better review :) it was a challenge to get it all in under 1.5k words but I'm glad the descent was apparent enough. "Skinless grapes" has been rolling around in my head for a while.
Whoa, this is amazing! You've rendered the artist's misery and fear perfectly. There's a hint of possession here. The artist is sharing his head with someone else, who has coloured his view of the world, and robbed him of the perspective that made his whole existence. Sometimes I don't understand the reasons why someone would do something but in this case I could. Great work!
Wow, this was intense! I loved the descent into confusion and despair when it became clear that the surgery changed how the artist sees the world for the worse. Powerful stuff, and exceptionally well written!
Reading this had me totally locked in, wow! The phrase: “My eyeballs felt like two skinless grapes coated in thick, sharp salt chunks in their sockets. But I had to see,” captured this piece’s tension so stunningly. It truly felt like we were following the artist right down his descent. Amazing work!
Thank you so much! That's such great feedback! i couldn't ask for a better review :) it was a challenge to get it all in under 1.5k words but I'm glad the descent was apparent enough. "Skinless grapes" has been rolling around in my head for a while.
Whoa, this is amazing! You've rendered the artist's misery and fear perfectly. There's a hint of possession here. The artist is sharing his head with someone else, who has coloured his view of the world, and robbed him of the perspective that made his whole existence. Sometimes I don't understand the reasons why someone would do something but in this case I could. Great work!
Thank you so much, Wendy! I had a lot of fun writing this one although it hurt my heart to be so mean to Sarah and Bart.
Wow, this was intense! I loved the descent into confusion and despair when it became clear that the surgery changed how the artist sees the world for the worse. Powerful stuff, and exceptionally well written!
Thank you so much!! I appreciate you giving it a read and for hosting the prompts. Happy to have your EYES on it.