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Offscreenshaman's avatar

This was devastating and beautiful. The weight of grief, identity collapse, and trauma-bonded intimacy is woven into every line, sometimes with quiet tenderness, sometimes with cosmic horror.

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R. M. Greta's avatar

Thank you for writing a comment that makes me feel the heartbreak all over again. I am glad the depth these two feel for each other comes through. I appreciate it!

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Bea's avatar

Ditto this!

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R. M. Greta's avatar

Thank you!!

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Alex Jenkin's avatar

This was such an amazing story I loved your creativity and the way you created something so surreal and dissociative whilst simultaneously being deeply personal and feeling “lived”.

There were moments where I felt excited, lost, and ready to cry and never truly understood why..

Having read your description I definitely resonated with your story and wonderful expression of it. You did capture something of those dark diabolical bonds from trauma that some people never understand.. ❤️

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R. M. Greta's avatar

Thank you so much. I truly appreciate you reading the whole thing and giving me such meaningful feedback.

I am so touched that it all meant something to you. That's all I could ask for, and makes it all worth it.

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Alex Jenkin's avatar

Absolutely, it’s what I’m here for haha.

Really wonderful though, I’m going to sit back and read it again from start to finish so I can absorb it fully. So cinematic, it would make an awesome short film or comic book.

The fact that it has a sci fi end was always gonna peak my interest 🤓

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R. M. Greta's avatar

I'm honored.

And yes, I'm finding that adding a little bit of horror and sci-fi really gets the gears in my head turning as far as symbolism and being able to fully depict emotions and scenarios.

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Alex Jenkin's avatar

It’s such a fun genre.. maybe I should try some sci fi poetry..

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R. M. Greta's avatar

Please do!

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Alex Jenkin's avatar

Also if you ever wanna do a collab where I help with foley, sound design, little bits of music and whatnot for a short story I’d be super keen.

Been thinking of throwing it out to Substack but thought I should ask my buddies first.. obviously no stress or pressure, I get independent art is all about being independent sometimes 😅

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